Help on essay about celebrity role models...10 pts!!?

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Should Celebrities and Athletes take Responsibility in Being a Role Model?
Why are there so many athletes and celebrities these days failing as role models? Should they bear any responsibility at all for being role models to society? After all, they are the people whom we look up to; especially children and young adults. At some point of our lives, (no matter how old) we have had some kind of role model, for most it was a celebrity or sports figure; a role model was anyone appealing. Now the sad thing is in today鈥檚 society, we put way too much emphasis on these role models. We manipulate or adopt what we see like clothing, behavior, hairstyles, and actions; the media. In other words, Hollywood sets the norms, and society follows. This is one of the reasons why it is critical that celebrities and athletes need to recognize their impact upon the public. Children are always watching and observing adult behavior partly because adults are the ones who have answers to questions. While parents can control what children are exposed to, they cannot completely shield children from the onslaught of Hollywood trends that flash in front of their eyes: commercials, billboards, movies, and on tv.
鈥淚 am a role model and if I don鈥檛 step up or stand up for the issues that are important to the people, then I take just as much to blame as a 50 cent or a Snoop Dogg.鈥?br> Rapper KRS-One once said during a telephone interview (McKevie 1). There are those celebrities out there who are willing to take the consequences and responsibility of their actions, and KRS-One is one of the few. As I was growing up, I remember that the major celebrities of that time were people like Britney Spears. I used to idolize Britney Spears like many others, up until the time she started going downhill. Back in the late 90鈥檚, she was famous for her beauty, singing, and personality. But now she is popular for the opposite; to have a laugh out of her because of the sluttyness, drugs, and divorce, etc. When a junior high student was asked what he thought of Spears now, this is what he said: 鈥淚 used to like Britney Spears when I was younger鈥 mean, she shaved her head for Pete鈥檚 sake. What鈥檚 going on with her?鈥?(McKevie 2). So, why is it that the media publicizes more of the negative side of Hollywood? I think it is because in reality, people tend to be more interested and engaged in the Hollywood scandals. Hence, it also makes a lot of money and brings in millions of viewers. For example, the TV show, 鈥淭MZ鈥?exposes celebrities and athletes in reality, and shows the ugly side of the famous. When it first aired on the Internet in 2005, it had 120 plus viewers per month, (an additional 9 million compared to 鈥淓xtra鈥?and 鈥淎ccess Hollywood鈥? (FOX news 1).

Yes i really think that being a role model is very critical about behaviour and stuff like that because for example if a football player rapes a girl then maybe kids and irresponsible young adults might think that it is the right thing to do.