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To Many Tamales is about a young girl named Maria. The story takes place on Christmas Eve. Her favorite cousins were coming over, her mom asked for her help on the kitchen and she felt all grown-up because she was helping her mother make tamales. However, she wanted to wear something else. Maria loved her mothers ring, she loved how it sparkled. When her mother left the kitchen to answer the telephone, Maria couldn鈥檛 help herself. So she decided to try it on her thumb. Then Maria returned to kneading the masa. As a result of that she lost the ring in the dough. When she realized that she had lost the ring she made her cousins eat the whole batch of tamales, thinking that it was in one of them. Everyone starting eating the tamales and there was only one left. Everyone took a bite of it and the last person was Danny, one of Maria鈥檚 cousins. Danny said he swallowed something hard, Maria thought Danny ate the ring, now she had to confront her mother about it. She went into the living room and told her. When Maria was talking to her mother she noticed the ring on her mother鈥檚 hand. Maria鈥檚 mother laughed and she said it was in the left over dough.

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U had some grammar/spelling errors. I guess anything is okay.. but it really depends on what grade u are in. If you're really in college and that's your summary, i think there's a problem. but if you're in middle school, i think it's okay.. if it's high school, i think u can improve.

What do you guy's think?
To Many Tamales is about a young girl named Maria. The story takes place on Christmas Eve. Her favorite cousins were coming over, her mom asked for her help on the kitchen and she felt all grown-up because she was helping her mother make tamales. However, she wanted to wear something else. Maria loved her mothers ring, she loved how it sparkled. When her mother left the kitchen to answer the telephone, Maria couldn鈥檛 help herself. So she decided to try it on her thumb. Then Maria returned to kneading the masa. As a result of that she lost the ring in the dough. When she realized that she had lost the ring she made her cousins eat the whole batch of tamales, thinking that it was in one of them. Everyone starting eating the tamales and there was only one left. Everyone took a bite of it and the last person was Danny, one of Maria鈥檚 cousins. Danny said he swallowed something hard, Maria thought Danny ate the ring, now she had to confront her mother about it. She went into the living room and told her. When Maria was talking to her mother she noticed the ring on her mother鈥檚 hand. Maria鈥檚 mother laughed and she said it was in the left over dough