Does this letter sound okay? Please read. Any revisions?

I enjoyed meeting you and appreciate the information you shared during the interview. I wanted to take this opportunity to thank you for interviewing me for the Medical Assisting position with Absolute Medical Care on April 17, 2006. I enjoyed meeting with you and I learned a great deal about the type of Doctors you have as well as your plans to expand your practice.

This position sounds very interesting and I am confident that my education (A recent recipient of a scholarship along with my 3.5 grade point average) and also along with my experience have provided me with the qualifications necessary to work effectively with your team. Once again, thank you for the opportunity to interview for a position with your Medical Office. I am excited about the prospect of working with such a dedicated team of professionals. If you request any additional information, please do not hesitate to contact me. Thank you for your time and consideration, and I look forward to hearing from you.

(Addressed to the person you had the interview with...)

I would like to thank you for taking the time out of your day to interview me for the position of Medical Assistant. It was a pleasure to learn about the Doctors you have on staff as well as the future plans you have on expanding your practice.

I am very interested in the position of Medical assistant. I believe that my education and background experience will provide your company with the qualifications required to be an effective employee for your team.

I am excited about the prospect of working for Absolute Medical Care. If you should need any additional information from me, please contact me at your earliest convenience at the telephone number(s) listed below.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Regards

(Your name)

(Telephone numbers listed here/address if needed)

It sounds very good but remove the first line entirely. It is redundant as you say it again further into your letter.

On the next to last sentence change "request" to "require"

Very good letter. Good luck, I hope you get the job.

You need to tighten this up. Take out the the () info, as the person has it at hand if you gave them your resume and revise your first paragraph - too many "thank yous."

Be precise and to the point. If you can keep it to 2-3 sentences that would be best. Most people don't want to read that much.

You need to take out the first sentence because you repeat it again after the second sentence. Put a coma after have before as well. I would take out also along with. I would change with your Medical Office to with Absolute Medical Care. Change request to need.

It sounds ok but you wrote that you enjoyed meeting them twice in your first paragraph therefore i would just change the last bit to I LEARNED A GREAT DEAL........... I would also change the word THIS which starts your second paragraph to the word THE and finally where you added on your experience i would have continued this in the brackets and wrote (A RECENT RECIPIENT OF A SCHOLARSHIP ALONG WITH MY 3.5 GRADE POINT AVERAGE AND ADDED EXPERIENCE.)
I hope this helps
Good luck in your new job
Michelle.

Don't repeat how you appreciate their interview five times. Say it once in the first paragraph and repeat it at the end worded differently ie "Thanks again for your time." Keep it simple. Also don't say much about how you learned a lot. You are supposed to know everything already. Good point on the teamwork section. That is always good. On the last sentence of the first Paragraph,((I enjoyed meeting with you and I learned a great deal about the type of Doctors you have as well as your plans to expand your practice)) Instead think of something like, "I was thrilled to meet with you and your associates and was interested to learn of your plans to expand your practice. I would love the chance to share in you vision of the future." It sounds cheese but you might be able to incorporate it somewhere. Good Luck. The most important thing is be yourself. In person or in a letter. Write it using your own personality. Make them think of you and picture your face when they read it. Hold off on the grovelling.

defo take out the first sentence as you do say it again later on. Also if you do keep in information in brackets always put a comma before and after and don't put a capital keep it lower case ie.

....my education, (a recent receipt.....),

Sounds god to me but:
It was a pleasure meeting you, and I appreciate
The Medical Assistant position
Do not repeat " I enjoyed meeting with you" You shall use: It was a great opportunity to learn about your medical
staff and your company visions for the future.

This position is very interesting and I know and Iam the one for.
Please contact me for any addtional information you may
deem necessary

In the first paragraph you say "I enjoyed meeting with you" twice, it's repetitive. Change one. "type of Doctors" no capitalization. in "(A recent recipient of..." you should not have a capital A. "and also along with" says the same thing 2 time, try either and also, or and along with, not both. Although personally i feel that simply "and my experience" is best, but you might want to add "previous" So i would have that read "and with my previous experience" "If you request" should be either "If you require" or If you would like to request" and put your contact info in immediately after "contact me at"

Remove the first sentence, only because the verb Enjoy sounds like you were having fun, instead use the word engrossing, or cultivating) I found the interview engrossing and cultivating. Start with the second sentence. It should be the Medical Assistant position. You really don't have to repeat the Name of the company, unless you're trying to convince them that you know the Name of the company, nor the date.(optional) Try and concentrate on the subjects discussed during the interview. Waste not Want not. The Position sounds INTersting, not very. Start a new sentence with I am confident. Don't mention the Scholarship unless its related to the Job. Like a scholarship for Medical Techs (optional, u can show off). GPA is always good to mention. I am confident that my ed, and my experience....Not, along with. Thank you for granting me the opportunity to apply for a position in your medical office. For additional information, contact me at........or If you need/require additional info, contact... This sentence should end the conversation, then your closing, Yours Truly....... Your time and consideration are appreciated or thank you (as you state) but the sentence Regarding the additional info must be last. The sentence that states your ed and qualification can help is a good sentence. It sounds really nice.