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What do you think of this song?


i dont really think im good at writing songs and i dont show anyone my songs, i need some opinions
plus i need to know if its good as a song or a poem

here it goes.......
Bad Days

Bridge:
i can't find a way
to share my bad days, with you

Chorus:
when you ask me
"hows your day"
theres more than just "hey, it was fine....."
no, no

Verse1:
i got up today
found out i was late
there was nothing i could do.....

Verse2:
i thought it was my luck
the morning just sucked
my boss lowered my pay
there was nothing i could do....
except go on with my day

Bridge:
i cant find a way
to tell 'bout my bad days, with you

Chorus:
when you ask me
"hows your day"
theres more than just "hey, it was fine
no, no

Verse3:
the office was a mess
i couldn't clean it up
it sure was hard to work

i came home and told you
my day was just fine,
when the truth was



please be honest about my song..... tell me if it sucked, was good, or even tell me what you would add or change, i need one more line.

last line= 'killing me inside'

Its OK, shouldnt the verses all have the same amount of lines in them?

In all honesty,
the lyrics aren't too good,
but then again,
plenty of songs have bad lyrics but are still loved
because of the music itself,
so it depends on how you brought it all together.
Freddie Mercury said that he thought his melodies were better than his lyrics.
Maybe you're the same?
Except Freddie's lyrics were amazing, so I don't know what he was talking about. Well, so were his melodies.
You know what? Nevermind.
My point is: The lyrics aren't the best, but the music itself is what actually matters.

ummm.....it was kinda wierd.....i would add more things people can relate to and exnay on the weird stuff, like obsessing about your office and work.

I like! =) how is your day?

I'm sorry but I didn't really like it.

its kind of funny
the part were your boss lowered your pay

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