Please rate these?

im 13 i wrote these like a month ago

My soul burns by day
And cries by night
As darkness and light collide...
Do i sway to death, or to life?
Darkness takes a hold
Controlling my life
Feel the rush of hopeless despair
It tortures my soul.
Now go back
Return
My heart takes flight to where darkness meets light.
Maybe we'll meet inbetween
In a world where our souls burn bright
And our hearts pour out the pain of yesterday
Until light gives into darkness once again.
Or will light fade away
Clearing space for a ray of sun
Shining down on us
Bringing hope for tomorrow
And days to come


embracing the pain
pain holding death within its self
searching for freedom
its discovered
written in scars
a way out
written in my blood
finally i have
the freedom i pursue
only to discover its no freedom
confined to four walls
and darkness closing in
the blood pours out
im never to be seen again
but the tears running down your face
wash away the pain

so close
and yet so far
how can it be?
a broken connection between two hearts
two souls so close
but broken beyond repair
so close i can feel your breath on my face
but im deaf to a cry for help
a wall being built between two hearts
built by a lost soul
to afraid to love

are they any good?

I like 1 and 3 they were really good....and 2 i like it, but it didn't speak to me i guess :)

Good work though!

whoa. that really awesome if you wrote it.

Very good and very deep good job!

wow. thats pretty deep. and your only thirteen? im not really into that sort of stuff but you have talent :)

Not bad, would sound good if sung to some grunge or death metal track.

WOW! Wonderful! THumbs up! really love it! =]

AWESOME! It's like truely awesome!If i were to grade it 1-10, it would be 15. lol. Sweet work dude.

they are really soulful and i can tell you worked hard .
good job :) <3

i write my own songs & iam 10 but those ARE WAY better than mine

great! is it really yours ?! good!

These rock!

wooww!!! sum pretty deep lyrics!! they sound amazing (Im 14, i would never be able to write anything that gd =] ) and yh, i can imagine them being played to grunge/rock music!
xx

Too deppressing -_- Why doesn't anybody wright happy poetry?

Yes you got the talent. But you really should not advertise what you have written without some protection a copyright. You could have just lost your dream by doing so. In the future do not share unless you protect. Your are good so pursue your dream and good luck.