Are these good?

these are just drafts. and im only 13.
My soul burns by day
And cries by night
As darkness and light collide...
Do i sway to death, or to life?
Darkness takes a hold
Controlling my life
Feel the rush of hopeless despair
It tortures my soul.
Now go back
Return
My heart takes flight to where darkness meets light.
Maybe we'll meet inbetween
In a world where our souls burn bright
And our hearts pour out the pain of yesterday
Until light gives into darkness once again.
Or will light fade away
Clearing space for a ray of sun
Shining down on us
Bringing hope for tomorrow
And days to come


embracing the pain
pain holding death within its self
searching for freedom
its discovered
written in scars
a way out
written in my blood
finally i have
the freedom i pursue
only to discover its no freedom
confined to four walls
and darkness closing in
the blood pours out
im never to be seen again
but the tears running down your face
wash away the pain

so close
and yet so far
how can it be?
a broken connection between two hearts
two souls so close
but broken beyond repair
so close i can feel your breath on my face
but im deaf to a cry for help
a wall being built between two hearts
built by a lost soul
to afraid to love

are they any good?

Yes! I love your passion and intensity. They are definitely great poems; i'm not sure they're really good material for rock songs, though. They probably would be if you added some kind of chorus.

Better than I can. Have you also composed it?

yes awesome

yea I like them
they're awesome

i really enjoyed them, you're talented. :]

the second one was pretty good. The first one sounds like an angry 13 year old . A little too dramatic.
Don't cut yourself for any reason. Do something more productive like writing your peoms. Also try writing songs. You are very talented.

i dont really think so.
but keep at it bro.
you will get better.

Dude I loved how you told us your age so we wouldn't be mean to you! Are they poems, or songs?

no too poetic and emoie!