I think you need to put quotation marks and commas as well as the rest of the punctuation. She talks to herself way to much. Also the conversation in the first paragraph sounded to forced. What doe...

I dont think you have a medical problem, its just hat you seem to be alone alot. Try asking your parents if you can go out with friend more often, or invite friends to your house. (btw, somti...

Well maybe she didn't realize it was you at first because maybe your pic looks nothing like you (meaning it could be like a side pic.) You like this girl of course because you wouldn't...

Critiscm: - The grammar in general is pretty bad. - It keeps on switching back and forth between and present and past tense. - Too brief, unless this is just a story plan, in an actual book th...

It is your business if they are behaving like that right in front of you.They have no respect for themselves or for you. Unfortunately, all you can do is get up and leave when they start in, or st...

Are you in middle/high school? At that age a lot of guys bully other guys because of their own insecurities. The guy is probably incredibly insecure and bullies others to make himself look more tou...

The movie your describing sounds like a movie I saw called "An angel for May" It's about a boy that travels back in time, and meets a young girl named May during a war, they bec...

yeah! she really likes you and doesnt want to seem hmmmm whats the word....."desperate" to let you know. you should have asked her what was wrong that one day..it wouldnt have killed you ...

Some people are scared of what others may think if they let the truth out. The world is gaining acceptance of the gay and lesbian community but they still have a ways to go until everyone feels co...

ouch. tough situation. I would go with the non-drama kid. in my experiance, drama kids are players. believe it or not.... plus the other guy is going off to college, which means college girls. whic...

Similar to one from The Twilight Zone where a gunslinger sticks a knife in his dead enemy's grave and finds his coat being grabbed and dies of fright. Turns out he actually stabbed his knife t...

I think the key to this is when you say "I met all the people that I left behind, I remember we talked and laughed, it felt amazing.". Its the dream probably comes from the feeling tha...

Well the goat/man could represent satan or perhaps the darker side of yourself, that would explain his making excuses for your selfishness. The actions of your husband could be seen as he being to...

Wow you're a very creative story writer. I mean a celebrity adultery scandal funny... Of course next time you should say that its fictional so someone can choose not to read it.

hahahaha, good: your jokes made laugh so hard bad: im in the university computer room worse: I study at a university in Japan and now everyone thinks im crazy.