What do you think of my newest anime fanfic??

Ok, I've written many other fanfics and I'm thinking aout starting a new one. So can you please tell me what you think of the first part. It's supposed to be a Naruto hate/love kind of fanfic, but you really won't realize it here.
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"Wake up! Wake up!" you here someone say. "Come on, hurry! We're gonna be late for our mission!" you open your eyes to see Pakkun looking down at you. "Exactly what mission do we have today?" you ask tiredly. "We have to meet Kakashi at the Leaf Village gate by 5am" Pakkun jumps off your bed and starts to walk out of the room. "Just hurry up and meet us at the gate in 15 minutes" Pakkun jumps out the window and leaves you in your room.
You have been living with your desceased mother's best friend Kakashi since you were 6 years old. You take care of the dogs while Kakashi is away and today is your 15th birthday, the day you finally get to go on a mission with Kakashi. Your ninja rank is Chunin.
(running outta characters, just hang on a sec, brb)

You quickly get dressed, grab your ninja gear, and run out the door. You're running through town and you run straight into Naruto. "Oh, sorry Naruto, I'm late for a mission. Can't stay, gotta go!" you start running and you here Naruto whisper "Jack***"(sorry for language). You shake it off and keep running. "3 'til 5, oh crap, I'm gonna be late!" you start running faster. "Nice to see you made it, [insert awsome japanes name here]" Kakashi says as you stop right in front of him trying to catch your breath. You smile as Kakashi tells you the details on the mission.
"Ok, [insert awsome japanese name here], Saukra, Shikamaru. We're going to be collecting data on the Akatsuki today, so be on your toes" Kakashi hands each of you a scroll. "What's this for" Sakura bluntly asks. "It's for summoning Pakkun and the others, just in case you need them. This is a very dangerous mission, so be careful" Kakashi leads the 3 of you out of the leaf village, off to take care of your mission.
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END

So far so good.
Hey, if you ever finish it, u could try and put it up on the site my story is on.

well so far its good
ill wait for you to write the rest and come back later!

Not too bad.

Let me recommend www.fanfiction.net, if you wish to post it there.

I, personally, am working on several mahoromatic stories, but I am not yet ready to post there

It's Awesome! By the way, Hey what's up! I was in Reno over the weekend and went through a earthquake! Cool huh!

P.S. it was a 5.0! or 4.9?
2 channels had different answers!