A new poem?

On the desk 鈥?in her room,
A book of flowers; red and blue.
Each one a story, a brilliant hue.
At her hands they met their doom.



Tell me what you think, with brutal honesty.
If you hate it you damned well better tell me.

its not your best..

Light and whimsical. It's so shallow on the surface that it's deep.

B+ in my book. I beg to differ from others for it definitely isn't boring. It reminds me of a haiku in tone and mood.

Solid effort!

"When a tree sees a flower begin to bloom
that's when he feels the crowded branches in the room."

Its good, your rhythym is a little off but it still flows nicely

All you have to do is make sure your syllables match up and it will sound great

goooooooood poem