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Here are two kind of synopsis on a fictional story I want to write.. tell me which one you think would be more interesting..

1. its 2012 our soldiers are in north korea or russia, and there are rumors of a disease going through the forces kind of like rabies but its kinda hush hush.. the first bunch on them get back and the disease hits the country.. the government quarantines towns and cities within a week its out of control marshal law, within a month theres no communications most everyone is dead or is a *zombie* (the fast ones) haha.. and its just a story of 3 different groups and their survival

2. michael stratton lives in NY and he is on his way into the city to see his wifes film, hes sitting in traffic and a bright light flashes.. the next thing he knows is he wakes up in a concrete room next to a girl he has never met.. in the middle of miles of woods.they find a small group of people who wander around seeing ruined cities and trying to figure out what happened to the world.

just to give a little extra description..

1. when i was calling it a disease or rabies it was just a government cover up.. this would just be a basic zombie story with different groups trying to survive..

2. this one i have quite a few plot twists and stuff he is in the woods but its no where near where he was in ny the groups would eventually find eachother and no not ALL of them would get a long, i feel this one would be more interesting im just scared of ruining it because my writing skills arent magnificent yet

thanks to all those who have givin there opinion so far!

I like both, but the first one I'm not sure if it would be as interesting, since they're escaping from a disease (and later, I assume, zombies)
But the second one is really original, because anything could have happened. A destructive bomb thrown by terrorists could have destroyed almost everything, aliens could have abducted them, his memory could have been modified, he might have gone back in time...the nice thing about that story is that you can keep it in suspense, don't tell us what really happened until at least the 2nd half of the middle.

I really like the second one. Such mystery to what happened will keep readers intrigued and anxious to what happens next.

I like both of them. I think the 1st one would be a more complicated story if you want it to make sense but i think if you have time or just want to you should write both. I know i'd read them.

Probably the first one would be more interesting though (unless you get some really good plot twists in the second one)

Your first idea, I must say, reminded me instantly of the novella "I Am Legend." Way too close for comfort.

(If I'm only wrong because you wrote "zombie" or anything like walking dead people, and you just mean there are, for some reason I don't know, 3 groups of people around... That's a bit different; kinda').

Your second idea you could go with... at least I've never read anything yet regarding that. It may be difficult for you to explain the passage of time, the other groups of people...

And if, when one 'group' sees another, do the people all just magically get along (will they run toward each other or away? why?), and how your protagonist got into the middle of woods (can be explained much later, actually)...

But "the woods" are why I throw out the 'passage of time' as being of interest; just in case these woods grew where there used to be a now "ruined city"...

Lots to plot; keep it active; and mainly, have a good time writing--

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