Can someone read my essay and critique.?

Who is not guilty of serving their family an affordably priced value meal for dinner in place of a home cooked meal? Fifty years ago that was unheard of. Most people at that time ate most of their meals at home. Mothers especially made breakfast, lunch and dinner. However, since the first fast food restaurant opened its doors decades ago the way our society eats had dramatically changed. It is not uncommon for people to eat on the go. The fast food industry, among, other things, has been instrumental in providing new jobs, changing the way the way people eat and creating a new health crisis with much of its consumers.
In almost every major city across the world there are fast food restaurants. And the more locations there are the more people that are needed to work in them. Typically, those who work in these establishments are teenagers and people with limited education and opportunities. These positions are usually easy to obtain. If it were not for fast food companies many people would have an even harder time obtaining employment. Also in recent years a lot of fast food companies are now investing in their workers with manager training programs and franchise opportunities. With programs like these on the rise working at a fast food restaurant is slowly loosing the stigma that was once associated with it. Another point to add is that the rise of jobs and the popularity of this industry have bought out many important issues like food safety and minimum wage into the mainstream.
In a world of convenience, it is only logical that easier ways of eating out would emerge. The fast food industry has been at the forefront with ideas. Companies spend millions trying to bring in more customers and earn more profits. One of the most revolutionary ideas is the drive-thru window. With more people working outside the home than ever before there is less time to prepare meals. Plus restaurants are offering tasty choices at reasonable costs. It is also safe to say that people are eating different varieties of food due to the many different chains out there, something that was quite rare years ago. It is not uncommon to go grocery shopping and stop to get a quick bite to eat on the way out. Companies are also now designing restaurants to look more attractive and chic. In some instances companies are holding board meetings in the restaurants rather than the traditional conference room.
However, the biggest impact that the fast food industry has made is by changing the shape of our society. Within the last decade people are becoming more and more overweight. Health issues such as high blood pressure, diabetes and heart disease have become more prevalent. Healthcare workers and scientist says the foods found in many of these restaurants are to blame. Childhood obesity has become a hot topic lately and most attribute it to the heavy marketing of fast food restaurants to children and young people. The issue has gotten even more controversial since several lawsuits have been filed against large fast food chains from individuals who claim they became fat from eating their food. It has divided people across the board. It is widely known that foods from these restaurants are high in fat, sodium and sugar. Some say, people should develop self control with this knowledge, while others claim it is not just the food but our lifestyle and culture that contributes to our deteriorating health.
All in all, the fast food industry has taken this nation and the world by storm. Regardless of a persons鈥?opinion on the issues of its growth, people agree that it has changed our society for sure. The development of jobs and providing society an easier way to eat are all a result of its growth. Now companies need to work on developing healthier food choices for its customers.

first paragraph you used the word "had" make it "has" since eats, is present tense. no comma after the word "among" in first paragraph. also in first paragraph, you need to add a comma after "people eat". first two sentences in paragraph 2 need a comma. paragraph 3 "it is also safe to say" you need a comma after the word say. "within the last decade" you need a comma after decade. the rest looks fine. and wonderful job! i wrote a report almost identical to it. :)

Here! Here! Author! Author!...I really liked this....have you ever watch the documentary "Super Size Me"?.....if not you should...this was very good,thanks!

Hmm... title it...

Your first paragraph has to have an opening, thesis statement and previews of what you are going to talk about. Also, spice it up a bit, seems too... boring
no offense... just trying to get people to read essays is tough, so you definetly need an attention grabber. Try making the first question in your paragraph shorter, to the point, but still makes them wonder and want to read.
There's a start for you!

well done

In the second paragraph, make the very first sentence your topic sentence. It should tell the reader what is coming up in the paragraph. Every topic sentence (the first sentence), in every paragraph should refer back to the opening paragraph.

Remember to structure essay BODY PARAGRAPHS with SEX.
Statement - State your opening topic sentence
Explain - Explain what your talking about in the statement
EXample - Use an example which demonstrates your statement

Excellent start though.... just work on structure

This sort of gives you a good idea...
http://www.gc.maricopa.edu/English/essay...
http://www.gc.maricopa.edu/English/essay...

Hope this helps... Good luck