New poem I just wrote..."The Dream Premonition" Opinions please?

The Dream Premonition

Twilight appears within my mind
A dream they may call it
But I find that more will unwind

An omen to the seer
A desire to the poor
The unknown riddle
That seems somewhat obscure

The fantasy of wealth
Shall rot with the essence of time
The nightmare of decease
As the death rope you will climb

Could it be true?
These revelations come into sight
I find that pleasant and evil,
Must arrive then ignite

Hindering time will keep me now
I step forward and slow my tread
For I am unaware
Of what may lie ahead

I conceal my fears
I then detect
A miscalculation
If I am correct

The terrors that shock me
Keep me tossing and turning all night
I veil those horrors
Instead I must fight

This sign advised me
To confront what鈥檚 there
This one simple dream had saved me
From a lifetime of despair

i think its very good!

i wouldn't be surprised if i see it somewhere published in a book by girleq!

"Could it be true?
These revelations come into sight
I find that pleasant and evil,
Must arrive then ignite"
this one is realllllly superb
U r a goood.... no better poet than me.(though my english vocabulary is weak still i write poems).
But u have written best poem.

aww wow i like it coz its a cool poem that means something, but for once not trying to be emo!

very tasteful :)

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