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I need some one who are good with words to read my pargraph and reword it properly for me. I am not please with word but don't know how to change wording.

Smart growth is the use of city planning to insure an environmental growth that maximizes the use of land and resources. It is a way to control urban sprawl; smart growth refers to an increase in the population of educated people. Smart growth draws new jobs, businesses and corporations, to the community. For example, places like medical centers, computer-manufacturing plants and major corporations. Smart growth ensures that there are positions available for professionals and skilled workers. Smart growth and development can expand a community the resources and opportunity to build and revitalize new resident, business, refurbish a main street, build new schools, and develop vibrant places to live, and safe playground for children. There are many different approaches to smart growth things such as apartments over shopping centers

Sounds good to me ,a few too many sentences either
starting w/ or containing "smart growth".
Try something like "it also ensures that....."
and "coupled with development it can......."

"Smart growth" is the use of city planning to ensure an environmental growth that maximizes the use of land and resources. It is a way to control urban sprawl. Smart growth also refers to an increase in the population of educated people. Smart growth creates new jobs and draws businesses and corporations, to the community, for example, places like medical centers, computer-manufacturing plants and major corporations. Smart growth ensures that there are positions available for professionals and skilled workers. Smart growth and development can give a community the resources and opportunity to build and revitalize new residences and businesses, refurbish a main street, build new schools, and develop vibrant places to live and safe playgrounds for children. There are many different approaches to smart growth, such as apartments over shopping centers...


~The wording was pretty much okay. Indent the first line of the paragraph. I changed a few things, but nothing major. Good job.

Smart growth is the use of city planning to insure an environmental growth that maximizes the use of land and resources.

It is a way to control urban sprawl;
increase in the population of educated people.
draws new jobs, businesses and corporations, to the community.

For example, places like medical centers, computer-manufacturing plants and major corporations.

Smart growth ensures that there are positions available for professionals and skilled workers.
development can expand a community the resources and opportunity to build and revitalize new resident, business, refurbish a main street, build new schools, and develop vibrant places to live, and safe playground for children.
There are many different approaches to smart growth things such as apartments over shopping centers

I rewrote the first two sentences and the last. To be honest, some parts of your paragraph are grammatically incorrect.

Smart growth is best described as the use of city planning to insure proper growth that maximizes land and resource use while minimizing environmental impact. Smart growth is a way to control urban growth while increasing the population of educated people.

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